[alifjenius]

QUOTE (john12 @ Saturday, Dec 3 2011, 21:01)

I didn't remove those but remove the lines which insults you. Sorry, again

Nothing is taken

[KaRzY6]

Hello everyone, it's me, KaRzY6 doing another DYOM mission review. Today I'm going to review a mission made by Adam_Donnell, and the name is Motel Madness.

Link - http://dyom.gtagames.nl/?act=show&id=4150

Writing Good The writing was good, he had fairly good English. There were a few spelling and grammar mistakes, but you can still tell what it says. He used plenty of coloured text. In my opinion, he used a bit to much.

Presentation Good The cutscenes were pretty good. On a fairly good angle, and focuses on the person who is speaking (while using cutscenes as a dialogue).

Length Excellent I'm not actually too sure, but i would say that the mission can be completed in the 9-14 minute range. It was the perfect length for a single (A mission not included in a mission-pack, storyline or some sort of story).

Difficulty Easy The mission wasn't overly hard, though it wasn't piss easy either. I would say it was easy. The enemy mostly had weaker or equal weapon power to the player.

Variety Very good The variety was very good. I liked it..

• Actors - Gerald (Ken Rosenberg), Eric (valet), Fred (Kent Paul), hookers, randoms, Big Bear, etc.
• Weapons/Pick-ups - Dildos, canes, spray cans, chainsaw, katana, brass knuckles, nightstick, shovel, combat shotgun, etc.
• Vehicles - Bus, Primo (??, not to sure), etc.
• Objects - Doors, police officer's body parts, etc.

Overall: It was a good single mission, with a small story to it. Anyway, good work to the designer. I loved playing it, and looking forward to more of your missions.

Ratings: 7/10. Good work, here's a cookie

[john12]

Who is he? Did you asked from DYOM site? If so, then ok.

[KaRzY6]

QUOTE (john12 @ Tuesday, Dec 6 2011, 14:50)

Who is he? Did you asked from DYOM site? If so, then ok.

He's on the DYOM Website, not on GTAForums.

[john12]

Oh, ok.

I am gonna Review MCJ's Misson too. Will be good know.

[john12]

Hello guys, today i will review MCJ's Mission-The Contract. Please click the mission name to be directed. Review Time!

Writing: Very Good- Some spelling mistakes but the dialouges were meaningful and understandable.

Presentation: Excellent- The cutscenes blew me to Mars. The cutscene and animation was awsome. . Some actors weren't hidden but who cares? A good use of explosions and animation.

The Contract

Length: Excellent- Your name is Mike Clark and you are a contract killer. You live in LS, the crime city. You get your first killer. Your client tells the details and you go to the Verdant Bluffs. You find the killer's men and you need to kill everyone on your path. After killing the killer, you get a good bike chase with 4 stars and go home.

Difficulty: Medium- The diving part is easy but fighting part might be hard but you have got a sniper, uzi, shotgun and silencer. Everything is planned well. Many covering spaces and all. The enemies are easy to beat but have M4's in their hand so Medium.

Variety: Excellent- The actory variety was less but objects were put nicely. The most important sh*t was the weapon set. Uzi for good length and speed, silencer for good shot and noiseless gun, shotgun will keep the enemies down and sniper can kill anyone leaving the killer as he has a desert eagle. Otherwise, excellent.

Overall- /

The mission must be enrolled in contest. The sense of the mission, i didn't have it in any other mission (even mine). MCJ wanted the feedback so here i am giving, well done. This is your first mission but glows brightly. Please give it a try and feedback at Designer lounge. The was another Review from John12. More from me and thanks for reading.

[Nitesh aka AAAAAAA]

Hello everyone,

Today, I'm going to review 4 missions made by abishai.kochara . They're part of his Los Santos Stories series.

Please click on the link below in order to view the topic and find links to download them:
http://www.gtaforums.com/index.php?showtopic=493273

Now, it's time for the review,

- Writing: Good, although there were some grammatical errors and some minor punctuations error, the texts are fully understandable.
- Presentation: Good Although few, the cutscenes were well presented and the timings was good.

hooking em up
- Length: Short, as it takes about 3 minutes. The player, CJ, has to and the GSF members have to go and kill some Vagos. A shoot-out takes place.
- Difficulty: Medium. The mission gets much easier if you take your gang to the shoot- out area but if you go alone, you are going to be outnumbered by the vagos, and the wanted level is also enabled, so you also have to stay safe from the police.
- Variety:Decent. Characters include CJ, GSF members, Vagos members. Weapons include Desert eagle, micro-uzis and sub-machine guns.

more of the vagos
- Length: Too short, as it takes about 1 minute to complete. The player is at the previos location and has to kill more of the vagos.
- Difficulty: Very easy. Most of the killing is done by the allies, so you just have to watch the fun.
- Variety:Decent. Characters include CJ, GSF members, Vagos members. Weapons include Desert eagle, micro-uzis, sub-machine guns and sawn-off shotguns.

a grave for grove
- Length: Good, as it takes about 5 minutes to complete. This time you play as the vagos and have to kill the GSF member at the same location as the previous.
- Difficulty: Very hard!. This time you are only two and your friend must survive. There are two huge groups of GSF members that you have to kill and on top of that the wanted level is also on.
- Variety:Decent. Characters include CJ, GSF members, Vagos members. Weapons include Desert eagle, micro-uzis, sub-machine guns and shotguns.

Overall, the missions were good. The mission packs is highly recommended for those who like action packed missions with a lot of shootout and high difficulty missions. Just one thing, the wanted level was enabled and it gets annoying especially when it reaches three stars. My advice would be that, if you want to keep realistic missions you can keep the maximum wanted level to be two. This will also reduce the difficulty. I couldn't play mission four because it crashes for me, but you made a lot of improvement in terms of the length of the mission in that. The author did a good job and must continue with it.

[Notna]

Is here any missions to be reviewed? Now I have time again so I would maybe wrote up some reviews again.

[john12]

QUOTE (Notna @ Saturday, Dec 10 2011, 13:53)

Is here any missions to be reviewed? Now I have time again so I would maybe wrote up some reviews again.

I don't know.

@alif: I have completed the review, excpect the review in an hour.

[alifjenius]

QUOTE (john12 @ Sunday, Dec 11 2011, 12:39)

@alif: I have completed the review, excpect the review in an hour.

Nice ! Can't wait for it !

[abishai.kochara]

@nitesh
thanks man, thought no one was ever gonna review it, actually in A grave for grove, just keep bruno with you otherwise just drive around and ram your your car into the grove

@notna
well you can review the chapter 3 of core,

[john12]

@alif: I am teribbly sorry but i can't do the review now... I will do it on 15th.

[alifjenius]

@john12 : Too bad. Okay then, expected the review to be in this topic in 15th Dec

[john12]

I had some free time from sanskrit as i already prepared so the.. REVIEW IS OVER!!!

Expect it withen 2 hrs.

[alifjenius]

QUOTE (john12 @ Monday, Dec 12 2011, 17:58)

I had some free time from sanskrit as i already prepared so the.. REVIEW IS OVER!!! Expect it withen 2 hrs.

Ok, hope it will be true this time

[john12]

Hello guys, today I am gonna Review the mission pack-S.A Noire which is designed by alifjenius. Please click the title of the mission pack to be directed there. Ok, Review Time!

Writing: Very Good- Really many spelling mistakes but understandable. The writing was flowing with the story too. Well do alif.

Presentation: Excellent- Awsome with those cutscenes and chasing parts. I loved it and everyone will do.

Alright, missions. There are 8 missions in total.


Test Drive

Length: Very Good - You got a new car. sh*t! Yes, tampa is a sh*t from the mission 'Puncture Wounds'.
You go for a drive aswell as clean some criminals. The criminals are all in car not cold feet. You drive corner to corner of SF and meet with Brando, the Mayor of SF. WTF! After cleaning them you go back to the SFPD.

Difficulty: Hard- You might think driving is a child's play but for your kind information, the tampa has just 1000 health points (HP) but it is bullet proof (BP) and tire proof (TP). The criminals do drive-by (of corse, they would do that only not gonna listen to the f*cking radio ). The drive-by sh*t won't affect you but don't go close to the fools at all. They damage your sh*t and tampa is done for good but the Mist Surive sh*t is off so tension! Patriot criminals or Brando's enemies hold a gun which isn't mini, yup they hold the Holy Minigun . Don't get so tensed if your vehicle isn't blasted as it can survive but it is PATRIOT not any small vehicle. If you go cold feet, DIE ASSHOLES! You must pick the miniguns if... and only if you are cold feet but don't even mess with them. Travelling is important as the title says.

Variety: Excellent- Man, mind your creativity next time, you are the best in variety sh*ts. Many weapons and skins answell as cars and heli's. Realism was missing only here or else, Awsome.

Old Reeca

Length: Good- You go for some food and meet some asshole . Old Reeca (of corse, the title says everything. The driving part is good enough as you go to Well Stacked Pizza (um... yummy Cheese Potassium Cyanide Pizza. Well I don't eat it but Old Reeca ate ). Good Cutscene effect just like a movie. Barber Battle where a lady comes and f*cks everything.

Difficulty: Easy- Driving is Bread and Butter and executing the events are child's play too. Nothing much happenes here at all leaving some f*cking humour.

Variety: Excellent- Really alif, Time is your son? (no.. no.. I know you aren't married ) Speechless works from you puts you at the top of everyone's respect list (not because of your help but because of your name, no.. no really you did well my child). Every object and actor were set correct, well done.

Hard Suspect

Lenght: Excellent- You start from the same apartments where your girlfriend lives. You meet with Crazy Wife.... of the Pizza Guy. You follow him to his house. If you ever get lost or something, naugthy alif has put DETOUR signs around. Thanks for that sh*t. When you go and ask them, Sam Wllington's (who is he? Play S.A Noire part 2) men come and attack you. You don't have a nice cover but the famiy helps you. Now here is the f*cking problem but i didn't give up. You use any car, rifas will come with enforcement and destroy that sh*tty washington anyways because of the drive-by. I walked upto Doherty and then jacked a car. This can irritate you a bit.

Difficulty: Hard- This time, it was too tough to beat 6-7 cars with full Rifas. Driving is important source here. I can't say that it will be piece of cake for professionals too because the teleport objective placement was really bad. We appear near the group of people in seconds with no cover. That crazy wife, she can destroy your car so use the DETOUR signs to reach their home quickly. After reaching, a gunfight with armor but without cover but still good use of different attacks. After that, sh*t happens. This isn't a joke or something but really sh*t happens. Every Rifa comes in a sh*tty vehicle which can spin and throw you away so be careful. Alif, i didn't seen the son of that crazy wife infact i didn't even survive the attack even if the family helped... You can only survive if you go from the allyway of Ocean Flats from Matt's Path (sure to play it. It's awsome ).

Variety: Excellent- We still can't ignore the realism. Well, excellent use of skins aswell as cars, weapons and objects. Thanks for that DETOUR sh*t.

Rifa Revolution

Length: Excellent- This is historic. Gangwars. You would love it! But difficulty... this isn't difficuty section so... the mission was awsome! You start from SFPD Headquarters. Ringo get's attacked by rifas and countrymen. Now Ringo went to chinatown and asked Mei Lian to come but she got kidnapped by Rifas. Things are really interesting here. You go to a motel... and enforce with Triads and kill every sh*thead. Mei Ling isn't found but found another criminal (good. How many criminals were in this Noire?). Now he sets a bomb and take back the broadway and meet with S.S (Secret Service). Well, he get's shocked to see a Pimp Mobile in SFPD .

Difficulty: Very Hard- Continue.. Continue... Massive attacks! One by One! Totally action pack in the motel (how wil people sleep peacefully? Well you all know what they do ). Ali, you will be suprised to see that I failed this mission 5 times! Really Hard guys. Need to be a professional.

Variety: Excellent- As usual, Realism. I guess your every mission will result in Excellent reward. Nothing to say as i said in every para.

Please, Mr. Barber!

Length: Very Good- To be true, this mission is really easy one where driving and chasing is important. I loled when Sean was doing Drive-by to the police fellows for using camara trick. This is pretty simple. You go to Neil Shortbottom (not from the Harry Potter Series. Sure to check out Deatly Hallows part 1 and 2. It's awsome as Voldemort shows his power to Hogwarts. Lol, spoiler it was but sure to watch . Back to topic). This mission is full of LOLs. You need to chase a rifa and take him down. After reaching to SFPD, Neil is in the bars. So all the 3 are found. So who is the real criminal behind the stage? Continue and check the next mission info too.

Difficulty: Very Easy- Atlast alif, this mission was easy enough for handling. Only A small chase and killing sh*t or else just cutscenes.

Variety: Excellent- Every part of it was loling and realistic. Awsome work again from you.

There is a bug in this mission. DON'T GET IN THE BUFFALO BEFORE IT SAYS "Get in the Buffalo" because the car hides after that. If you sit in it then you will be wasted.

Potassium Cyanide

Length: Excellent- Boat chase! First was foot then bike then car and now this. I am waiting for a plane chase too . Travelling is the main soure here also. You go to cyber cafe and check out GTAForums site (no.. no.. Ringo checked it. Actually John checked the site and spammers (russians Mafias) came). Afterwards you go to the south of SF where fishers misuse the Potassium. The dealer isn't dead and we find out that He is the criminal. Time to finish this unfinished job.

Difficulty: Medium- Travelling is a piece of cake but chase is hard as the boat doesn't stop at all. You might need to jump but with luck. Good use of that S.S sh*t again . The Russians aren't easy nor tough so Medium.

Variety: Excellent- Many objects showing what really people are doing. Again, Fabulous work from alif.

Mr. Sunlight (this month is winter BTW)

Length: Excellent- This is another criminal taking out mission. He is gonna pay for his deeds! Actually, here action and thrill mattters. Chicken fry (gta 5 ). You will be burned by Mr. Sunlight. You have a f*cking Desert Eagle which has very less accuracy. Ringo puts a bomb set in Tampa. That sh*t is gonna blow like 'Yaka-Yaka- Boom- Boom' (sorry if spelling is wrong). You go to the drug factory and the country and rifas story. Another case solved!

Difficulty: Medium- It should be hard but isn't. Desert eagle is cool but waste in accuracy. If you don't get Hitman skills you would take long time for finishing those pricks. Watch out! After blowing the sh*t of the factory, sh*t happens. RPG guy is down and He arrives + firetruckes too ! Take him out and finish this case.

Variety: Excellent- Ah! Wonderful with the action and skins and objects and blah blah (voiding the grammar ). Speechless works from you!

Back from the U.S.S.R

Length: Very Good- Why there is this mission? We need to find the real S.S. You get an invitation from Sean who tells that there is a party in Pleaseures Dome. You all go to the party. Well careful for your brand new car! Yup it's back. When you reach to the party, Ringo ask some questions based on your relationship between You and Chynthia . You think it's better that you don't stay in this party so you go some burning air. sh*t! Your car get's blown up and the person behind is.... PLAY S.A. Noire . You team up with S.S. who's real name is Samual. Now you go to the lolly land- Los Satos.

Difficulty: Easy- Travelling is important here also. Nothing much leaving many cutscenes. A nice gunfight but with m4 so it is easy. NOthing much but it was easy.

Variety: Excellent- Many actors and and animations. I love this sh*t of realism. Expect for getting award from Dutchy3010 a medal.

Overall-9.999/10.

Ah! Your missions have a different feeling. I like it! and continue with that feeling. Awsome job and i know that your future is bright with this sh*t. Good luck with other things too. So this was another review from John12. Thanks for reading guys.

This post has been edited by john12 on Monday, Dec 12 2011, 12:22

[SatournFan]

Awesome review, john. Added to my respect list again.

By the way, who the f*ck is Old Recca? I thought his name is Old Reece .

To other reviewers: Can anyone review my Life In San Diablo series? Here is the link to topic. Thanks!

[john12]

Lol, sorry. Edited the post and corrected it.

I would do but i have my exams. I might do it on sat or sun but not sure.

[alifjenius]

Man, I'm speechless. That was a great review. You always praised me in the review, thanks a lot, pal !
I'll put it in my missions pack topic as soon as I can

Those missions are pretty tough, huh ?

[john12]

Yeah, i failed some of your missions many time..

But it doesn't matters.