[xGhostx]

Hello guys!Please review these missions for me,so I can improve my mission better
Here's the link:

http://dyom.gtagames.nl/?act=show&id=18260

http://dyom.gtagames.nl/?act=show&id=18299

http://dyom.gtagames.nl/?act=show&id=18333

http://dyom.gtagames.nl/?act=show&id=18272

I would be honor if I have a pro to review it!
Thank you!

This post has been edited by xGhostx on Sunday, Apr 8 2012, 08:12

[ToniForelli]

I'll review your missions xGhostx, but later.

[ToniForelli]

Hello everyone my name is ToniForelli and i will do another DYOM mission review, ok so lets start reviewing xGhostx's mission called MW3:Soap's War Operation Kingfish now time to review

"Writing: Good
There were several mistakes i've found.
"Presentation: Excellent
God it felt like i was watching a movie or something so i give it Excellent

"Length Excellent
I'm not used to walk in area 69 and it took me somewhere like 11 minutes.

"Difficulty Medium
Enemy actors have a high ammount of health and medium accuracy. It's best that you get to cover and kill them, simple as that.

"Variety Could be better
Didn't saw many people on this mission nor many cars.

Overall 8.5/10
Mission was exciting, it felt like a movie. However, i didn't like when there was an explosion(urgh... almost died).

Ok i reviewed the mission now lets start with MW3:The Captain I

"Writing: Good
There were several mistakes i've found again.
"Presentation: Very good
It was very good, but not excellent

"Length Decent
Just shoot the dummies, walk through obstacles and volia 4 minutes.

"Difficulty Very easy
It's a training course, everything is very easy.

"Variety Excellent
It must've took you ages to build that training course. I hope you had a drawing and you rebuilt it.

Overall 8/10
It would have been 5/10, but seeing that training course made me raise my rating up.

Next mission is MW3:The Captain III

"Writing: Very Good
I didn't saw that many mistakes anymore.
"Presentation: Very good
It was very good. Don't know what to say anything else.

"Length Good
Many cutscenes, enemies and that's it. It made it longer.

"Difficulty Easy
They got high health, but not accuracy so it shouldn't be a problem.

"Variety Could be better
Army guys, SWAT, Rojas, Task Force leader and 1 actor would be in this mission, it would be Decent.

Overall 9/10
It was more fun. I like those missions when you attack someone in the mansion and i liked pretty much almost everything.

And the last one MW3:Ghost Warrior Final

"Writing: Very good
2 mistakes i've found.
"Presentation: Excellent
The rating suggests it.

"Length Excellent
Damn those checkpoints of yours while in casino really mess me up. I had to snipe, search, shoot and knife.

"Difficulty Easy
Mostly you rely on stealth at first. Then you engage after you've made it to the roof. Good thing they have low accuracy.

"Variety Decent
Army guy, objects, cars, Makarov's guys, Makarov himself.

Overall 9/10
The mission was great. Stealth, sniping and attacking was a perfect combo.
So my response to this is :

Keep Up

[lee_atsugai]

Can someone do a mission review on the first mission of Crisis of 2016 : Rage of Task Force 141?

[xGhostx]

QUOTE (ToniForelli @ Friday, Apr 13 2012, 21:55)

Hello everyone my name is ToniForelli and i will do another DYOM mission review, ok so lets start reviewing xGhostx's mission called MW3:Soap's War Operation Kingfish now time to review "Writing: Good There were several mistakes i've found. "Presentation: Excellent God it felt like i was watching a movie or something so i give it Excellent "Length Excellent I'm not used to walk in area 69 and it took me somewhere like 11 minutes. "Difficulty Medium Enemy actors have a high ammount of health and medium accuracy. It's best that you get to cover and kill them, simple as that. "Variety Could be better Didn't saw many people on this mission nor many cars. Overall 8.5/10 Mission was exciting, it felt like a movie. However, i didn't like when there was an explosion(urgh... almost died). Ok i reviewed the mission now lets start with MW3:The Captain I "Writing: Good There were several mistakes i've found again. "Presentation: Very good It was very good, but not excellent "Length Decent Just shoot the dummies, walk through obstacles and volia 4 minutes. "Difficulty Very easy It's a training course, everything is very easy. "Variety Excellent It must've took you ages to build that training course. I hope you had a drawing and you rebuilt it. Overall 8/10 It would have been 5/10, but seeing that training course made me raise my rating up. Next mission is MW3:The Captain III "Writing: Very Good I didn't saw that many mistakes anymore. "Presentation: Very good It was very good. Don't know what to say anything else. "Length Good Many cutscenes, enemies and that's it. It made it longer. "Difficulty Easy They got high health, but not accuracy so it shouldn't be a problem. "Variety Could be better Army guys, SWAT, Rojas, Task Force leader and 1 actor would be in this mission, it would be Decent. Overall 9/10 It was more fun. I like those missions when you attack someone in the mansion and i liked pretty much almost everything. And the last one MW3:Ghost Warrior Final "Writing: Very good 2 mistakes i've found. "Presentation: Excellent The rating suggests it. "Length Excellent Damn those checkpoints of yours while in casino really mess me up. I had to snipe, search, shoot and knife. "Difficulty Easy Mostly you rely on stealth at first. Then you engage after you've made it to the roof. Good thing they have low accuracy. "Variety Decent Army guy, objects, cars, Makarov's guys, Makarov himself. Overall 9/10 The mission was great. Stealth, sniping and attacking was a perfect combo. So my response to this is : Keep Up

Thank you for reviewing my missions ToniForelli ! I will try to improve the variety, the difficulty and my writing, too!

[ToniForelli]

QUOTE (lee_atsugai @ Saturday, Apr 14 2012, 02:38)

Can someone do a mission review on the first mission of Crisis of 2016 : Rage of Task Force 141?

No problem Lee.

[Yezz007]

Hello !, please review 2 of my missions :
The Professional Assassins
Unsmoothly Assassination

Yeah, i would like to make a good storyline...

[ToniForelli]

I'll review yours too after i'm finished with lee atsugai's.

[KaRzY6]

I request the first 2 missions of 'Lee Fang Chronicles'.

Please, make it professional, and NO smilies. Cheers.

[ToniForelli]

That's it i'm making a list and i'll take Karzy's review:
2012 DYOM review requests
lee_atsugai - Night of Doom
Reviewed
Yezz007 - The Professional Assassins
Unsmoothly Assassination
Reviewed
KaRzY6 - Welcome To The Drug Business
Building The Team
Reviewed
IXMJXI - His whole chapter 1
Cancelled

This post has been edited by ToniForelli on Sunday, May 13 2012, 13:06

[ToniForelli]

Hello everyone my name is ToniForelli and i will do another DYOM mission review, ok so lets start reviewing lee_atsugai's mission called Night of Doom from his mission pack called Crisis of 2016:Rage of Task Force 141 now time to review

"Writing: Very Good
I know that Nikolai is russian and two words i can't remember were bad and i'll make an exception.
"Presentation: Excellent
Awesome presentation. Enemies, cutscene angle, couple surprises make it excellent

"Length Good
Enemies with high health take your time and took me 5 minutes and 34 seconds.

"Difficulty Medium
It can be sometimes difficult when you're in a building and they have high health with medium accuracy and also surrounded.

"Variety Good
Well, there were many drug dealing actors and some objects. It's strange when an old man is a drug dealer .

Overall 9/10
Mission was exciting. It had its moments and there were many enemies. Various guns and actors and when i got in into that building i felt relaxed until i got attacked.

Keep Up

I'll do Yezz007's review soon or maybe tomorrow.

[KaRzY6]

QUOTE (ToniForelli @ Thursday, Apr 19 2012, 04:54)

i'll take Karzy's review

Thanks man, appreciate it

[IXMJXI]

Good day guys, can anyone review my Mission-pack? Thanks in advance.

[ToniForelli]

Hello everyone my name is ToniForelli and i will do another DYOM mission review, ok so lets start reviewing Yezz007's mission called The Professional Assassins from his mission pack called The Professional Assassin now time to review

"Writing: Decent
I've seen a pile of mistakes in this mission. Your writing reminds me of my friend, maybe you are him.
"Presentation: Good
50% good 50% bad. There were parts i didn't like though, but there were few fun parts of the mission. I believe your mission was like quantity over quality.

"Length Good
Long mission. I had to drive, shoot enemies and nothing else.

"Difficulty Medium
While there are lots of enemies headshotable, in the LSPD building you can get killed when you don't act fast.

"Variety Good
I saw few different actors and few different cars.

Overall 7/10
Mostly the mission was long, but it lacked good storyline quality. I think you're less talking more action type of the guy.

Now lets review another mission and it's called Unsmoothly Assassination

"Writing: Good
In this mission you improved your grammar i see, but you got to learn naming punctuation.
"Presentation: Very good
I liked this mission even more. Good story quality and quantity are merged into one.

"Length Decent
Not very long cause i just had to kill enemies.

"Difficulty Hard
You got to be on the look out. There are a couple enemies that can kill you if you are off guard.

"Variety Good
Different actors and nothing else.

Overall 9/10
I liked this mission more than your previous. It was hard and that is why i gave you a high rating.

Keep Up

IXMJXI i'll take your review too since there's nobody want to review your mission pack.

[Yezz007]

Yeah, thanks for the review , i'll put it in my topic and......

QUOTE (ToniForelli @ Friday @ Apr 20 2012, 22:45)

Your writing reminds me of my friend, maybe you are him.

No , i never have a friend from Italy, maybe 'will' .

[ToniForelli]

Hello everyone my name is ToniForelli and i will do another DYOM mission review, ok so lets start reviewing KaRzY6's mission called Welcome To The Drug Business from his mission pack called Lee Fang Chronicles now time to review

"Writing: Very good
Found a couple mistakes nothing else.
"Presentation: Excellent
Liked the storyline and especially when Lee worked for Rockstar and was in making of GTA V, you surely deserve an excellent achievement.

"Length Short
It's an intro mission so it's short. You had to drive from your home and to (forgot his name) place and home again.

"Difficulty Very Easy
It's an intro mission. No enemies so it's very easy.

"Variety Could be better
One car and 3 actors. Well it's an intro mission so i(like everybody else) don't expect many objects, cars or actors.

Overall 8.5/10
What's there to review. It's an intro mission and i don't like to review such short missions.

Now lets review another mission and it's called Building The Team

"Writing: Excellent
I didn't saw any mistakes so there is nothing else to say.
"Presentation: Excellent
Like the way cutscenes are positioned and the storyline, good job.

"Length Decent
You just drive and drive and drive until you've reached Tierra Robada and fight some enemies.

"Difficulty Easy
Your allies will help you in combat, but be careful the car is not bulletproof.

"Variety Decent
2 cars, few actors so what's there to say?

Overall 9/10
So the mission was great. It had action this time(and when i mean by action is that people fight or shoot). Picked up Lee's friends and just drove to the Tierra Robada until we've fought our enemies also they were following us.

Keep Up

[xGhostx]

Hello guys, I would like to request a review of my missions, here's the link:
http://dyom.gtagames.nl/?act=show&id=18697
Thanks in advance.

This post has been edited by xGhostx on Friday, Apr 27 2012, 08:10

[NothingSpecial]

Could anyone review the 2nd, 3rd and 4th mission of my MP Denise's Stories? Click the userbar on my signature and you're in.

I really wish Nitesh will do this one...

[Nitesh aka AAAAAAA]

@NothingSpecial
I will do it, but you will have to wait for a while because I also have IXMJXI's request.

I will try to do both reviews by the end of this week.

[KaRzY6]

@Toni

Thanks man.