[Tyler]

QUOTE (Ronmar The Only @ Wednesday, Jul 18 2012, 20:50)

I hate when I'm at that point where I have ideas in my head for scripts, short stories, and essays, but I have no real desire to write. Instead, I rather just brainstorm for them.

Yeah, I know the feeling. It's important and all, but brainstorming just doesn't have the magic of pure writing. It doesn't feel like you're telling a story as much as researching parts of it.

Unfortunately, I've been doing a lot of brainstorming/outlining for this little fantasy world I've been creating. I mean, it's fun to actually flesh out your own little world, but I find myself indirectly learning languages and ancient culture.

[Ronmar The Only]

I'm thinking about doing a series of short stories inspired by Skyrim.

Here would be the possible opening for one from the perspective of a Khajiit named Qa'Tesh who is obsessed with blood.

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Qa’Tesh smells the blood, ah that sweet, sweet blood. It sings a song that only he can hear, and Qa’Tesh can barely contain himself from nipping at the air and sucking in that aroma, but Qa’Tesh can hold himself back. Soon Qa’Tesh will taste sweet blood on his blade just as he did with others. They were not formidable foes, and barely satisfying, but they were bloody, and Qa’Tesh always like that.

[Mokrie Dela]

hey guys, If it's ok, i'd like to share a friend's work with you. I read it and was impressed with it and think you'll enjoy it. It's only short, but i have to link to it, because i can't, in good conscience, post it up here under my name. Let me know what you think

http://isitfunnotbeingme.tumblr.com/post/2...als-we-call-men

[shiva s]

QUOTE (Mokrie Dela @ Monday, Jul 23 2012, 09:16)

hey guys, If it's ok, i'd like to share a friend's work with you. I read it and was impressed with it and think you'll enjoy it. It's only short, but i have to link to it, because i can't, in good conscience, post it up here under my name. Let me know what you think http://isitfunnotbeingme.tumblr.com/post/2...als-we-call-men

Wow, man, your friend has really did a great job. I really loved it. Though, it was short, it had a good message and theme.
One question, I know Edmund's mom is heart broken when her husband died and I also know she wants to marry Goldnesse for his wealth. Is there any reasons besides that for to marry Goldnesse ?
anyway, your friend did a great job. ^^

[Mokrie Dela]

I have no idea mate. All I know is He wrote it originally as a one shot and is considering expanding it.

[Eminence]

The guy can write, no doubt about it. It's crafted well. But the story doesn't really go anywhere. It's pretty stagnant, full of exposition; there's no hook or twist. So if it's a standalone piece, it doesn't really do anything. If it's part of a larger whole, it does little to make you read on.

[Mokrie Dela]

QUOTE (Eminence @ Monday, Jul 23 2012, 17:59)

The guy can write, no doubt about it. It's crafted well. But the story doesn't really go anywhere. It's pretty stagnant, full of exposition; there's no hook or twist. So if it's a standalone piece, it doesn't really do anything. If it's part of a larger whole, it does little to make you read on.

I think it was supposed to be expositional. As i said, he's thinking about expanding it. I personally don't know where he could take it, but would love to see more. Perhaps it doesn't go anywhere, but i think it does a pretty good job of setting itself up, if you know what i mean, and thought you guys would like it

[goin-god]

Has anyone read anything by British scholar Richard Evans?

I was thinking about buying his Third Reich Trilogy, but since it's kinda expensive I wanted to see if someone knows this author.
I investigated a bit (mostly the wiki article) and it seems he is a well known historian and his Trilogy about Nazism *seems* to be one of the best and most complete.

[AceRay]

Anyone interested in having a gander at Build Up Your Gang IV? If you don't know what that is, it's basically a forum game where you write stories about the gangs in Liberty City. They get rated by Staff (me and Aragond) and you get to buy weapons and vehicles your gang can use. Its having a bit of a comeback and it would be great if some of you GTA veterans had go.

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My latest chapter: Chapter 12: In My Restless Dreams, I See That Town.

[Lethal Nizzle]

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I've just realised that there's an add-on to the Arkham City storyline which pretty much does what I intended to do with my little Batman/Arkham City piece. Ah well, it was good for the hour or so that it lasted.

This post has been edited by Lethal Nizzle on Tuesday, Jul 31 2012, 17:22

[WelcomeToLibertyCity]

Don't know if you guys remember me, maybe a few of you will. Been talking to a guy around here and we might go through with making a story focused on the real life Irish Mob known as The Westies from Hell's Kitchen. It's going to be a realistic tale of two brothers involved with the mob, as close to the real thing as we can write. If it does happen - would anyone be interested in taking a gander?

[El Zilcho]

QUOTE (WelcomeToLibertyCity @ Wednesday, Aug 1 2012, 23:20)

Don't know if you guys remember me, maybe a few of you will. Been talking to a guy around here and we might go through with making a story focused on the real life Irish Mob known as The Westies from Hell's Kitchen. It's going to be a realistic tale of two brothers involved with the mob, as close to the real thing as we can write. If it does happen - would anyone be interested in taking a gander?

You've piqued my interest. Yeah, I'd give it a read if I'm about when it's done.

[Mokrie Dela]

Sure i'd give it a ganders.


anyone here seen this cammi moron? I've been saying for ages that we need more members in this section, but (i think it was eminence or Craig that said it:) this guy posts the most underwhelming stories (if you can call them that), that arent even as in depth as back page blurbs, ignores any advice given and insists on keeping his "style" which seems to me as lazy. I hate to be critical, i truely do, and i gave him a chance, but he simply cba and it makes me think of myself in a critical way: am i better than him, or just as bad? Are my works that i put up here guilty of the same things?

I think he's got bored now though.

[El Zilcho]

QUOTE (Mokrie Dela @ Thursday, Aug 2 2012, 11:03)

it makes me think of myself in a critical way: am i better than him, or just as bad? Are my works that i put up here guilty of the same things? I think he's got bored now though.

You're most definitely nothing like him. I've been critical of your work in the past, and have said I think it may have received undue attention; but it's still good quality and 100x better than the garbage cammi spews.

[shiva s]

QUOTE (Mokrie Dela @ Thursday, Aug 2 2012, 10:03)

Sure i'd give it a ganders. anyone here seen this cammi moron? I've been saying for ages that we need more members in this section, but (i think it was eminence or Craig that said it:) this guy posts the most underwhelming stories (if you can call them that), that arent even as in depth as back page blurbs, ignores any advice given and insists on keeping his "style" which seems to me as lazy. I hate to be critical, i truely do, and i gave him a chance, but he simply cba and it makes me think of myself in a critical way: am i better than him, or just as bad? Are my works that i put up here guilty of the same things? I think he's got bored now though.

C'mon, man. You're one of the great writer 'round here and he's just another immature newbie. I knew him before. He'd been in the DYOM sub forums before. He never listened to anyone's words and kept arguing if someone makes a critic on his work. I played the missions he created and gave him a lengthy feedback but he just responded with nothing more than a 'pointless reply'. Though, many hated him, I tried to be friendly with him to help him improve but he never changed. So, I just ignored him.
Don't compare yourself with a newbie. You've really entertained all the readers around here with all your works. Just ignore him.

This post has been edited by shiva s on Thursday, Aug 2 2012, 12:23

[cammi]

Your all nice


Also my 250th post

[Eminence]

QUOTE (Mokrie Dela @ Thursday, Aug 2 2012, 11:03)

Sure i'd give it a ganders. anyone here seen this cammi moron? I've been saying for ages that we need more members in this section, but (i think it was eminence or Craig that said it:) this guy posts the most underwhelming stories (if you can call them that), that arent even as in depth as back page blurbs, ignores any advice given and insists on keeping his "style" which seems to me as lazy. I hate to be critical, i truely do, and i gave him a chance, but he simply cba and it makes me think of myself in a critical way: am i better than him, or just as bad? Are my works that i put up here guilty of the same things? I think he's got bored now though.

Come on man, that's a bit low. Everyone starts somewhere, and even if it can be frustrating to feel like your advice is being ignored, I bet that's not truly the case. And from what I've seen, it's more a case of being overwhelmed by enthusiasm to start multiple projects - which we see often - than any true intent to frustrate.

Cammi, I don't think you're as 'moronic' as is being described. Keep writing, see what happens. If people offer advice, act on it. If people insult you, ignore it.

[Mokrie Dela]

I didn't mean to insult him or sound like a c**t. I've turned into a cynical old bastard lately, and found myself quick to criticise. I'll hold my hands up and say that was a bit harsh.

I have no time for people who don't seem to listen, so perhaps that's it.


@shiva/el zilcho. I'll paraphrase a story i heard about Rabindranath Tagore on his deathbed. A friend said he had a lot to be proud about, that he was written hundreds of peoms, all of them great. Tagore began to weep, and his friend asked "what's wrong, does death frighten you?"
"No" Tagore replied. "I have only just become a writer. Until now my buds have been half open. Each day more poems come to me each one better than the last. I am weeping at the injustice of being pruned by god"

My point is, we all search to improve ourselves, and we write hoping for it to be better than the last, we chase that unreachable goal of a "perfect" story. Eminence's reply made me look at my post, and made me realise i was too harsh on the guy. If he put some effort into his stories, followed them through, and took onboard advice, as well as being patient blah blah blah, then he might produce some good work. The first story i wrote in full, i read recently, and it truely was garbage.

I think the problem i have with cammi was the random message he sent me, asking to read his story (which i don't mind), and i offered my advice, which he then ignored and immediately posted the thing he PM'd me. in my opinion, he's a time waster and i have no time for him. I retract my statement calling him a moron, which wasn't called for, and as a writer, i'm ashamed to have said it.

[El Zilcho]

If he is acting in wilful, blatant ignorance, you're well within your rights to call him a moron. It's not the worst thing you could say - Eminence's point on respect is valid, and we should all try to adhere to it. But sometimes, honesty is the correct course. I've said it before and I'll repeat - we shouldn't censor ourselves here.

[shiva s]

Well, I never use to insult others but I feel kinda ashamed for calling him an immature newbie. I wanna apologise, cammi.
Atleast, try to follow the words of Mokrie and keep writing. Just don't stop.