[Yossarianite]

The alarms began to ring, Jarius lost balance and fell down. red lights flashed all around the plane, the pilot tried his level best to bring it under control, "UP, UP, UP you mothhead!" Cried Nick from behind, he lost balance as well, fell down and tried getting up unsuccessfully. "Its all planned, all under control, all under control" Jarius assured himself.
"Captain its a wing! Its gone, Germans blew it off! We're going down rapidly!" to which, the captain replied "SHUT UP!" A reply Jarius expected. Another blast cam from the back, they were all going down, "To the lifeboats!" cried the Captain, the pilot was the first to run off. Red lights flashing, 3 men running, Jarius followed. He saw Captain Black wounded as he walked up to the boat, "hows it feel cap'?", "Real bad son" Jarius picked him up carried him towards the lifeboats.
Red lights flashing as yet, his head ached and the memories came tearing back into Jarius's mind.

"Hows it going soldier?" whispered Major Tony from the steps leading to the terrace of the house they were hiding in. He was crouched lowly, SMG in hands, grinning. "As fine as I could be" shot back Jarius, worried about the Germans surrounding the house slowly. One was coming up, two were down there, all heavily armed with rifles, grenades and the knife who's name he couldn't remember. He had seen the two slowly, a short glimpse but the third one was unknown and by primary methods, they assumed he had the same equipment.
Burger Bob shot up from the wall next to which Jarius was crouched. He had his head low so no one could see him.
Bob shouted "HEY! Where are they? I saw two and I'm taking a sho.... AARGHH!!" shots were heard clear as Bob collapsed and fell back into the house on the other side of the wall. "Soldiers CHARGE!" Cried Tony and in a fit of madness shot the first one, got shot in the shoulder and ran off to the other side of the house, the two soldiers marched up and another head, that of Captain Bunny's popped out, "What happened?" "RUN you idiot!" cried Jarius and shot up towards the terrace dragging Capt. Bunny with him. They went up and crouched, waiting, hearing the footsteps coming up.
"Ok, when they're up, I'll act like I've surrendered, shoot 'em that instant, OK?" said Jarius, "Okee Pokee!" replied Bunny, and went to behind a tank, a water tank to be precise and hid.
The German soldiers, stepped and put their rifles on left and right chest, both.
They cried something in gibberish, probably German, in an act of sheer joy. Their happiness was not contained.
Tears of joy trickling down their eyes with Jarius shocked with unbelievable amusement, he realized they were probably new and he was their first kill. Capt. Bunny jumped from hiding "A rat, its a rat! Help me! Help!!" And he ran off. jarius wwas not pleased, he was shocked with disbelief and anger. Suddenly from behind came a number of shots from a SMG, Major Tony to the rescue! But before Jarius could say "nooooo!" There were two bodies lying in front of him. Hours later they reached the airfield they were supposed to be at.
They plane flew them to Squadron 13's base, on the flight, Jarius questioned Bunny
"What was the matter with you kid? Why'd you sign up if you were afraid of rats?"
"I...."
"No 'I's' 'ifs' or 'buts' shut up and follow my orders next time or I will court-martial you"
"Yes sir"
"Thats good"
The flight was pleasent and as soon as they reached the base, they headed over to their tents. Major Tony and Captain Jarius shared a tent. Major Tony headed out to the officer's club as usual and Jarius headed over to Danny's tent.
Captain Daniels, better known as Danny, was a fit and healthy man with a dark complexion, he was just about as much as Jarius but a little more tall than him.
He was packing his bags as he always did every afternoon.
"Why do you always pack your bags?"
"So that I can leave for home as soon as I can!"
"But there is a mission target, right? A number of missions required completed?"
"Yes.."
"So how do you expect to leave?"
"Maybe Colonel goes mad with yellow fever or amnesia and sends everyone home?"
"What?!"
"You heard what I said"
"You're kidding!"
"No I'm not!"
"Yes you are!"
"Lets go to that officers club"
"Yeah"

They headed towards the club, walking the muddy road that lead to it, there was grass all around and there were some trees at unusual distances. The weather was cool and they could feel the breeze blowing, it was pretty clear a rain was about break upon the base.
They both talked about the current affairs and mocked them, cracked jokes and at last, reached the club.
They headed over to the third table, their daily place and sat down. The waitress came as usual and took their orders.
All at once, Colonel Griffon entered the club with a scowl on his face as usual.
He was always frowning, scowling, cursing and sleeping.
His life was filled with nothing but the above. He sent his men on he most dangerous missions alone just so he could scare the wits out of them.
He was bald and the bald spot on his head shone always. That was what all the men joked about.
He was about to retire anyways and that was a relief to everyone but Major Black Scout, who couldn't
resist telling people that they me have a worse colonel for the squadron.
No one listened to him but that had an impact on their minds leading them to betting on the new colonel or just worrying day and night about it and always inquiring about further news.

As soon as he entered there was silence everywhere, he marched up the table at the end in the corner by the window and sat down with a sheer show of arrogance.
Jarius mocked the colonel and his bald spot, saying
"HoHo, the real reason for his retirement is because he's going in for a hair transpla.. whatsit therepy!"
"Yeah, wish we could torture him after his retirement!"
"Yes we can, we need his phone number though!"
"Ask him!"
"You ask him, you got the guts?"

Danny rose and walked towards the scowling colonel and his secratery, with Jarius laughing behind and said,
"Sir, Captain Jarius over there, wants your phone number, I have no idea at what pranks he's thinking up sir."
"WHAT??!"

The already angry colonel turned red with a little redness showing off on his bald spot.
Jarius was thinking Danny was in for it but the colonel headed towards him and bellowed.
"Take this man outside and have him shot! Shoot at him till your fingers go numb and you're out of ammunition."
"But sir..."
"Thats an order!"

The men next table dragged a pale Jarius out to be shot with Danny laughing hard behind, he collapsed with laughter and rose up to find Jarius dragged outside.
He tried stopping his laughter and stumbled along to the exit.
He pushed it open, jumped outside on the two men a little to late. *BLAM* BLAM*

The Boat to Sweden

*BLAM**BLAM*
Danny's jump was aimless, he fell into a muddy puddle and began getting up. This diverted the men about to shoot and Jarius dived to his right into the the wild bushed, getting wet mud on his faceand began crawling away.
At a distance, the Colonel's jeep could be seen roaring away, splashing mud all the way, the rain was pouring but Jrius notcied it now, the fear had scared him to death.
He got up with a start and suddenly took a look to his left, the two men were still there.... but with Danny!
"Serves that bastard right" was all Jarius said as he walked on towards the jungle to take the hard and long way back home, with no choice left but to walk halfway through the jungle, meet the road then, and walk to the tent.
But his consience gripped him and he ran back through woods, retracing his steps and thoughts, seeing the gruesome scene in front of him, where one of the men held Danny, while the other one thrashed him with the butt of his .45 in the stomach.
Jarius was heard and they turned toward him when he leaped all of a sudden, knocked him out by buttheading his chin, an action of amazement to Jarius who was never accurate.
THe second officer left hold of Danny in amazement and with the idea of breaking Jarius's nose, which he did, that too, with a loud CRACK! Danny was free and as the officer, buff, bulk, muscular mocking Jarius turned around only to be hit in his balls by Danny, the huge giant of a man sank away in pain with growling while Danny helped Jarius up and the left for the hospital, shoulder on shoulder.
No longer were they going to the tent, they decide, as Jarius remembered, he'd been shot inches above the hip, had a broken and bleeding nose, Danny on the other hand, a broken rib, severe stomach wounds a shoulder dislocation, probably because of his valiant but pretty useless jump and because of that shot with the butt of the gun in the shoulder.
Both with bleeding, blackened faces arrived at the hospital, only to be met by the most annoying peon and doctor.
Both of them scolding at the two and warning them about reporting to the superiors about indecent behaviour and treating them carelessly at the same time while Jarius and Danny, who never gave a damn, just lied on their beds, comfortably, with the lights shining down on them, while their smiling faces looked back up.
They were to be in the ward for a day or two as they were quiet injured, which was, as usual, a relief to the two as they never liked duty, it had all turned to sh*t.

The very next day, they were woken up by two nurses who were there for some work Jarius and Danny never knew about because they were in sleep and after being shaken awake, they couldn't keep their senses together, they fell asleep again, seeing nothing more than blurred visions before.
Jarius falling asleep began running into his memories again, for reasons that questioned his rational state of mind.

2. VIII B
Jarius was a christian who feared God and doubted him at the same time, he was afraid of people, he hated all around him and thought they were crazy.
He thought he was superhuman, he had a great father and less great mother, he got everything he wanted or needed. He lacked nothing, he had talent, he had guts, he was crazy, he was cool but it was just that minute fault some experienced in the society that made it all very different for him.
He wasn't so hateful to them before, never so angry or afraid or hateful or harsh.
It was until those times when he was thought different from others, discrimination even though he was the same, hate even though he was harmless, distaste though he was cultured, his thoughts and personality were ideal and were not narrow minded, he believed in society and cultural and distasted discrimination and racist. He was loved by his elders all around him, every elder who never even saw him loved him and held him high in their sights.
But the way the other kids took him, he was depressed, he had only a few friends who were like minded and were his friends, there were some like minded kids who even hated him. He was careful, angry, afraid. Few weeks and then few months, Jarius began transforming, his attitude was changing, his personality was changing, his thoughts, his mind, his ways, all of them changed, in all, he changed, in 9th Standard, he was a big grinning, jovial, angry, punch-throwing, trouble-making, crazy, mad, mindless freak who was cool and got caught by the teachers for one thing or the others, even though the kids might have hated him, he was a kid who was grinning and never had to see faces of dissapproval ever again, because they never even dared to talk to him and they were already in a opinion of him being crazy after two days of mad acts.
The teachers found a grinning kid who could study but only while grinning and annoying others.
All his life, Jarius only wanted to be absorbed in one way or the other and in 8th Standard, he was absorbed so heavily
he could remember every happy, crazy, laughing moment he had until it got over and the summer began and he went to VBJ(Vacation Bible Joy) and the people began to look at him differently ever since, wherever he went, disapproval met him, it changed him into what he was, what he was made, a grinning freak to the other kids.

'Mission Red Mother'

The mission by the name itself was hilarous to the men, who within minutes of the briefing began shivering.
Jarius was in the least worried and so was Danny and Captain RVI who expected a promotion withind a few days.
The mission was deadly, 16 men sent to infiltrate the enemy base, they were all the squadron could or would dare to promise.
While people chattered their teeths more or often, Jarius and Danny cracked jokes and went around annoying people and ended up annoying Danny himself, at that very moment turned up Private MAD and Rabb. They were crazy too, they loved jokes and annoying people and were Jarius's school friends, more or often the days were spent with countdowns to the missions and briefings which were ignored, then came personality development classes to
lift te men's morales which were ignored too, by Jarius's and his friends laughter and the rest of the men's chattering.
Danny and his lucky ass fell into a pit because of Jarius's pratical jokes and annoyance, it took 18 hours until he was rescued and brought back to base and put under medical care, thus, escaping the mission.
Captian Daniels face was full of smiles and grins and damn laughter whenever someone saw him, one of the senior docters even took him to be mad.
"You lucky bastard, you escaped." Complained Jarius with a scowl.
"I had it coming, thanks a lot Jarius! You're my true friend pal!" Replied Danny grinning.
MAD and Rabb began complaining as well and then started sulking towards Jarius and then as they left the tent, they walked up the muddy road to the Mess hall, MAD suddenly pouced on Jarius sending them both rolling into the ditch to their right, he began punching Jarius square in his face, within seconds Rabb made a jump into the ditch and began to kick Jarius.
With effort he struggled to break free, he pushed MAD and punched him helplessly, the punch sent MAD straight into a pipeline with a THUD! and the next moment MAD lay knocked out in the dirty muck in the ditch.
Rabb ran towards Jarius and raised his hand to deliver a blow, Jarius caught it and pushed him away, he climbed and shouted to Rabb who was climbing up as well
"You mad bro'?"
"Nah, we were just mad with you getting that fool into the med"
"Haha, you guys are crazy"
"You're even more"

7:49 AM
Two frowning, scowling faces waited to board the flight that'd take them to the drop zone, MAD was sent to the Medical tent as well, he was grinning even when he'd fainted, he'd cracked his skull and was meeted by a happy Danny next bed.
Rabb and Jarius heard none of the briefing, they stood in first in the line facing the plane, they were going into the jungle, to die, two frowns and scowls among 14 men chattering. They were all dead serious in frowns and a thought occured to Jarius, it
amused him so much that he couldn't keep himself from grinning and laughing, Rabb couldn't stay out and joined the party and so did the amused men when the commanding officer commanded them back to attention and
said he'd expected more from Jarius, who'd command the men in place of the commanding officer in case anything happened.
After a few minutes the two boarded the plane walking solemnly toward the jungle of death- Golohola.


This post has been edited by Yossarianite on Monday, Jun 25 2012, 12:53

[AceRay]

Mate, if there's one thing holding this back, its the paragraph breaks. Every new speaker needs a new line so its much clearer as to who's speaking. Instead of:

QUOTE

"UP, UP, UP you mothhead!" Cried Nick from behind, he lost balance as well, fell down and tried getting up unsuccessfully. "Its all planned, all under control, all under control" Jarius assured himself.

It really should be:

QUOTE

"UP, UP, UP you mothhead!" Cried Nick from behind, he lost balance as well, fell down and tried getting up unsuccessfully. "Its all planned, all under control, all under control" Jarius assured himself.

There, its much more obvious that Nick is the first speaker and Jarius is the second. Of course, it doesn't really matter if there's a space between the two lines but it doesn't really matter. Frankly, some of the lines are kind of a mess as they are.

I also felt it could have been a bit tighter, phrases are described a bit loosey-goosey. Some lines and descriptions aren't needed like "a tank, a water tank to be precise." Why not just call it a water tank and free up that useless phrase? However, your first paragraphs manage to draw me in with an exciting action scene so that was good (although I don't know whether its taking place on a plane or a boat, there's a pilot but then they're getting into lifeboats). I hope you manage to continue this and at least finish it off, manage to improve somewhat.

This post has been edited by AceRay on Friday, Jun 1 2012, 08:09

[Yossarianite]

QUOTE (AceRay @ Friday, Jun 1 2012, 06:29)

Mate, if there's one thing holding this back, its the paragraph breaks. Every new speaker needs a new line so its much clearer as to who's speaking. Instead of: QUOTE "UP, UP, UP you mothhead!" Cried Nick from behind, he lost balance as well, fell down and tried getting up unsuccessfully. "Its all planned, all under control, all under control" Jarius assured himself. It really should be: QUOTE "UP, UP, UP you mothhead!" Cried Nick from behind, he lost balance as well, fell down and tried getting up unsuccessfully. "Its all planned, all under control, all under control" Jarius assured himself. There, its much more obvious that Nick is the first speaker and Jarius is the second. Of course, it doesn't really matter if there's a space between the two lines but it doesn't really matter. Frankly, some of the lines are kind of a mess as they are. I also felt it could have been a bit tighter, phrases are described a bit loosey-goosey. Some lines and descriptions aren't needed like "a tank, a water tank to be precise." Why not just call it a water tank and free up that useless phrase? However, your first paragraphs manage to draw me in with an exciting action scene so that was good (although I don't know whether its taking place on a plane or a boat, there's a pilot but then they're getting into lifeboats). I hope you manage to continue this and at least finish it off, manage to improve somewhat.

I'll completely agree with you on the first part about the paragraphs, the second part about the water tanks, is a must, which you will realize later.
As for the action sequence, its pretty clear that they're all flashbacks. Its mentioned.
Thanks for your comments anyways!

[Yossarianite]

New addition to the story:

They headed towards the club, walking the muddy road that lead to it, there was grass all around and there were some trees at unusual distances. The weather was cool and they could feel the breeze blowing, it was pretty clear a rain was about break upon the base.
They both talked about the current affairs and mocked them, cracked jokes and at last, reached the club.
They headed over to the third table, their daily place and sat down. The waitress came as usual and took their orders.
All at once, Colonel Griffon entered the club with a scowl on his face as usual.
He was always frowning, scowling, cursing and sleeping.
His life was filled with nothing but the above. He sent his men on he most dangerous missions alone just so he could scare the wits out of them.
He was bald and the bald spot on his head shone always. That was what all the men joked about.
He was about to retire anyways and that was a relief to everyone but Major Black Scout, who couldn't
resist telling people that they me have a worse colonel for the squadron.
No one listened to him but that had an impact on their minds leading them to betting on the new colonel or just worrying day and night about it and always inquiring about further news.

As soon as he entered there was silence everywhere, he marched up the table at the end in the corner by the window and sat down with a sheer show of arrogance.
Jarius mocked the colonel and his bald spot, saying
"HoHo, the real reason for his retirement is because he's going in for a hair transpla.. whatsit therepy!"
"Yeah, wish we could torture him after his retirement!"
"Yes we can, we need his phone number though!"
"Ask him!"
"You ask him, you got the guts?"

Danny rose and walked towards the scowling colonel and his secratery, with Jarius laughing behind and said,
"Sir, Captain Jarius over there, wants your phone number, I have no idea at what pranks he's thinking up sir."
"WHAT??!"

The already angry colonel turned red with a little redness showing off on his bald spot.
Jarius was thinking Danny was in for it but the colonel headed towards him and bellowed.
"Take this man outside and have him shot! Shoot at him till your fingers go numb and you're out of ammunition."
"But sir..."
"Thats an order!"

The men next table dragged a pale Jarius out to be shot with Danny laughing hard behind, he collapsed with laughter and rose up to find Jarius dragged outside.
He tried stopping his laughter and stumbled along to the exit.
He pushed it open, jumped outside on the two men a little to late. *BLAM* BLAM*

The Boat to Sweden

This post has been edited by Yossarianite on Saturday, Jun 2 2012, 18:40

[AceRay]

Yeah, this was pretty good. It needs proof-reading cause some of the lines don't make sense but I think its an improvement. Sometimes its a little blasé about describing, like "there's a house, there's a tree." Try more interesting sentences. However, there's some fun dialogue here and there, although Jarius getting shot was a little unexpected. The characters are a little bit better characterized too, much better than the last one.

[Yossarianite]

QUOTE (AceRay @ Wednesday, Jun 6 2012, 06:30)

Yeah, this was pretty good. It needs proof-reading cause some of the lines don't make sense but I think its an improvement. Sometimes its a little blasé about describing, like "there's a house, there's a tree." Try more interesting sentences. However, there's some fun dialogue here and there, although Jarius getting shot was a little unexpected. The characters are a little bit better characterized too, much better than the last one.

Glad you liked it! Thanks for your feedback either way, anyways, the story begins now!
I'll add the next chapter later!

About making sentences interesting, I'll do my best at that! But do I have to explain and add detail more to make them interesting?

As for the unexpected shooting, well, wanted to make stuff realistic, hehe..

Thanks for your time!

[AceRay]

QUOTE (Yossarianite @ Wednesday, Jun 6 2012, 20:27)

About making sentences interesting, I'll do my best at that! But do I have to explain and add detail more to make them interesting?

Well, what I mean by that is that its a bit formulaic. Look at the first paragraph. There was grass, a road, a bar. Try to mix it up a little bit! instead of saying "They walked down the muddy road," how about going: "Their boots squished in the pools of mud as they hobbled down the gravely road to the club, raindrops falling onto their jackets." Its much more imaginative and atmospheric. Don't overdo it of course but think about it for next time. Its much better to let your readers figure out things for themselves instead of just telling them straight out.

[Yossarianite]

QUOTE (AceRay @ Wednesday, Jun 6 2012, 07:34)

QUOTE (Yossarianite @ Wednesday, Jun 6 2012, 20:27) About making sentences interesting, I'll do my best at that! But do I have to explain and add detail more to make them interesting? Well, what I mean by that is that its a bit formulaic. Look at the first paragraph. There was grass, a road, a bar. Try to mix it up a little bit! instead of saying "They walked down the muddy road," how about going: "Their boots squished in the pools of mud as they hobbled down the gravely road to the club, raindrops falling onto their jackets." Its much more imaginative and atmospheric. Don't overdo it of course but think about it for next time. Its much better to let your readers figure out things for themselves instead of just telling them straight out.

Ok, I get it now.

[Yossarianite]

NEW ADDITION!

*BLAM**BLAM*
Danny's jump was aimless, he fell into a muddy puddle and began getting up. This diverted the men about to shoot and Jarius dived to his right into the the wild bushed, getting wet mud on his faceand began crawling away.
At a distance, the Colonel's jeep could be seen roaring away, splashing mud all the way, the rain was pouring but Jrius notcied it now, the fear had scared him to death.
He got up with a start and suddenly took a look to his left, the two men were still there.... but with Danny!
"Serves that bastard right" was all Jarius said as he walked on towards the jungle to take the hard and long way back home, with no choice left but to walk halfway through the jungle, meet the road then, and walk to the tent.
But his consience gripped him and he ran back through woods, retracing his steps and thoughts, seeing the gruesome scene in front of him, where one of the men held Danny, while the other one thrashed him with the butt of his .45 in the stomach.
Jarius was heard and they turned toward him when he leaped all of a sudden, knocked him out by buttheading his chin, an action of amazement to Jarius who was never accurate.
THe second officer left hold of Danny in amazement and with the idea of breaking Jarius's nose, which he did, that too, with a loud CRACK! Danny was free and as the officer, buff, bulk, muscular mocking Jarius turned around only to be hit in his balls by Danny, the huge giant of a man sank away in pain with growling while Danny helped Jarius up and the left for the hospital, shoulder on shoulder.
No longer were they going to the tent, they decide, as Jarius remembered, he'd been shot inches above the hip, had a broken and bleeding nose, Danny on the other hand, a broken rib, severe stomach wounds a shoulder dislocation, probably because of his valiant but pretty useless jump and because of that shot with the butt of the gun in the shoulder.
Both with bleeding, blackened faces arrived at the hospital, only to be met by the most annoying peon and doctor.
Both of them scolding at the two and warning them about reporting to the superiors about indecent behaviour and treating them carelessly at the same time while Jarius and Danny, who never gave a damn, just lied on their beds, comfortably, with the lights shining down on them, while their smiling faces looked back up.
They were to be in the ward for a day or two as they were quiet injured, which was, as usual, a relief to the two as they never liked duty, it had all turned to sh*t.

... I'm adding more right now.

This post has been edited by Yossarianite on Wednesday, Jun 6 2012, 12:04

[Yossarianite]

The very next day, they were woken up by two nurses who were there for some work Jarius and Danny never knew about because they were in sleep and after being shaken awake, they couldn't keep their senses together, they fell asleep again, seeing nothing more than blurred visions before.
Jarius falling asleep began running into his memories again, for reasons that questioned his rational state of mind.

2. VIII B
Jarius was a christian who feared God and doubted him at the same time, he was afraid of people, he hated all around him and thought they were crazy.
He thought he was superhuman, he had a great father and less great mother, he got everything he wanted or needed. He lacked nothing, he had talent, he had guts, he was crazy, he was cool but it was just that minute fault some experienced in the society that made it all very different for him.
He wasn't so hateful to them before, never so angry or afraid or hateful or harsh.
It was until those times when he was thought different from others, discrimination even though he was the same, hate even though he was harmless, distaste though he was cultured, his thoughts and personality were ideal and were not narrow minded, he believed in society and cultural and distasted discrimination and racist. He was loved by his elders all around him, every elder who never even saw him loved him and held him high in their sights.
But the way the other kids took him, he was depressed, he had only a few friends who were like minded and were his friends, there were some like minded kids who even hated him. He was careful, angry, afraid. Few weeks and then few months, Jarius began transforming, his attitude was changing, his personality was changing, his thoughts, his mind, his ways, all of them changed, in all, he changed, in 9th Standard, he was a big grinning, jovial, angry, punch-throwing, trouble-making, crazy, mad, mindless freak who was cool and got caught by the teachers for one thing or the others, even though the kids might have hated him, he was a kid who was grinning and never had to see faces of disapproval ever again, because they never even dared to talk to him and they were already in a opinion of him being crazy after two days of mad acts.
The teachers found a grinning kid who could study but only while grinning and annoying others.
All his life, Jarius only wanted to be absorbed in one way or the other and in 8th Standard, he was absorbed so heavily
he could remember every happy, crazy, laughing moment he had until it got over and the summer began and he went to VBJ(Vacation Bible Joy) and the people began to look at him differently ever since, wherever he went, disapproval met him, it changed him into what he was, what he was made, a grinning freak to the other kids.

[Yossarianite]

'Mission Red Mother'

The mission by the name itself was hilarous to the men, who within minutes of the briefing began shivering.
Jarius was in the least worried and so was Danny and Captain RVI who expected a promotion withind a few days.
The mission was deadly, 16 men sent to infiltrate the enemy base, they were all the squadron could or would dare to promise.
While people chattered their teeths more or often, Jarius and Danny cracked jokes and went around annoying people and ended up annoying Danny himself, at that very moment turned up Private MAD and Rabb. They were crazy too, they loved jokes and annoying people and were Jarius's school friends, more or often the days were spent with countdowns to the missions and briefings which were ignored, then came personality development classes to
lift te men's morales which were ignored too, by Jarius's and his friends laughter and the rest of the men's chattering.
Danny and his lucky ass fell into a pit because of Jarius's pratical jokes and annoyance, it took 18 hours until he was rescued and brought back to base and put under medical care, thus, escaping the mission.
Captian Daniels face was full of smiles and grins and damn laughter whenever someone saw him, one of the senior docters even took him to be mad.
"You lucky bastard, you escaped." Complained Jarius with a scowl.
"I had it coming, thanks a lot Jarius! You're my true friend pal!" Replied Danny grinning.
MAD and Rabb began complaining as well and then started sulking towards Jarius and then as they left the tent, they walked up the muddy road to the Mess hall, MAD suddenly pouced on Jarius sending them both rolling into the ditch to their right, he began punching Jarius square in his face, within seconds Rabb made a jump into the ditch and began to kick Jarius.
With effort he struggled to break free, he pushed MAD and punched him helplessly, the punch sent MAD straight into a pipeline with a THUD! and the next moment MAD lay knocked out in the dirty muck in the ditch.
Rabb ran towards Jarius and raised his hand to deliver a blow, Jarius caught it and pushed him away, he climbed and shouted to Rabb who was climbing up as well
"You mad bro'?"
"Nah, we were just mad with you getting that fool into the med"
"Haha, you guys are crazy"
"You're even more"

7:49 AM
Two frowning, scowling faces waited to board the flight that'd take them to the drop zone, MAD was sent to the Medical tent as well, he was grinning even when he'd fainted, he'd cracked his skull and was meeted by a happy Danny next bed.
Rabb and Jarius heard none of the briefing, they stood in first in the line facing the plane, they were going into the jungle, to die, two frowns and scowls among 14 men chattering. They were all dead serious in frowns and a thought occured to Jarius, it
amused him so much that he couldn't keep himself from grinning and laughing, Rabb couldn't stay out and joined the party and so did the amused men when the commanding officer commanded them back to attention and
said he'd expected more from Jarius, who'd command the men in place of the commanding officer in case anything happened.
After a few minutes the two boarded the plane walking solemnly toward the jungle of death- Golohola.