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Brian Ray is a member from Vice Kings gang, one of the most dangerous gang in San Fierro. One day, a firefight between the Vice Kings and the San Diego Gang broke out in an alley on Chinatown, San Fierro. This shootout will change Brian's life FOREVER.
Brian Ray Age: 25 Affiliation: Vice Kings (1st Mission), Delta Team(The rest of the story) Status: Alive Brian is a member from Vice Kings gang. He later join the Delta Team because his gang betray him
Jackson Age: 27 Affiliation: Delta Team Status: Alive Jackson is the leader of the Delta Team. Before that, he is a most wanted criminal before his friends betray him
Paul Age: 24 Affiliation: Delta Team Status: Alive Paul is the strongest team member in the Delta Team. His partner in Delta Team is Jackson
Brad Age: 30 Affiliation: Delta Team Status: Dead Die in: Loose Ends Brad is member of the Delta Team. His specialist in Sniper give the Delta team more chance to win a fight
Vasquez Age: 33 Affiliation: Delta Team Status: Dead Die in: Loose Ends Vasquez is the oldest member in Delta Team. His partner in the team is Brad
General Marshall Age: 40 Affiliation: Delta Team,the Marine Status: Dead Die in: A Fatal Protection General Marshall is the commander of Delta Team. And he is close to Brian
Toreno Age: 38 Affiliation: Delta Team Status: Alive Toreno is the leader of Delta Team. He gives command to the team
Boss/Boss Age: ??? Affiliation: Vice Kings gang Status: Dead Die in: Chinatown War He is the leader of Vice Kings gang.
Breznev Age: ??? Affiliation: Morning Star Status: Alive He is the head of the illegal human experiment and the leader of the Morning Star
Tony Age: 33 Affiliation: San Diego Status: Alive The leader of San Diego gang. A very rich person and own a mansion
Ken Age: 30 Affiliation: The Syndicate Status: Alive The leader of the Syndicate. A very dangerous person
Simon Age: 29 Affiliation: Delta team Status: Alive One of the Toreno's bodyguard. A big fan of the Delta team
Roach Age: 27 Affiliation: Delta team Status: Alive One of the Toreno's bodyguard. A big fan of the Delta team
Ryan/Ryan Age: 25 Affiliation: The Syndicate ( El Sindicato) , Delta team ( The rest of the game )
Delta Team Status: Friend This secret team is quite same as STAG(From Saints Row the Third). Their goal is to eliminate every gangs in San Andreas
Vice Kings Gang Status: Enemy/Destroyed Destroyed in: Chinatown War Vice Kings gang is one of the most dangerous gang in San Fierro
San Diego Gang Status: Enemy San Diego is the Vice Kings rival gang
Morning Star Status: Enemy Morning Star is the most dangerous gang in San Andreas
The Syndicate Status: Enemy The Syndicate is a newcomer gangster in San Andreas, but don't underestimate them
The list will be updated as the story continue
Act 1: When the Good Things Go Bad - Link Face Your Fear - Link CQB Test - Link The Delta Forces - Link A Fatal Protection - Link Chinatown War - Link
Operation Black Rain - Link El Sindicato - Link Loose Ends - Link
I think this song might be fit to this mission pack
Yes, it's Saints Row the Third song. I think it might be useful for the upcoming trailer
The Delta Forces and A Fatal Protection by ToniForelli
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I'll review that for you since AznKei said i should prove myself if i want to become a reviewer. @Reserved: Lee_atsugai Hello everyone my name is ToniForelli and i will do my first review so i can join DYOM reviewer community and lets start reviewing lee_atsugai's mission called The Delta Forces from his mission pack called "Gangster and the Army" now time to review
"Writing:Very Good There were few grammar mistakes. Nothing too bad. "Presentation:Excellent Cutscenes are in good position and i would say it's excellent
"LengthDecent The mission wasn't long. All you had to do is to kill enemies from one deck to another.
"DifficultyVery Easy Enemies don't have very good accuracy and their health's are low so not the hardest mission, but atleast it's fun.
"VarietyDecent There were the army guys, some random people and few enemies that look different. If there was one different actor then it would be good.
[B]Overall 7/10 I would give 6/10, but grammar and camera positioning made me raise the rating up. The downside is that the enemies are weak and that mission isn't long. Still i enjoyed and you will probably do . Next mission is A Fatal Protection "Writing:Very Good Same as the last mission i played and nothing changed. "Presentation:Very Good One cutscene wasn't positioned as it should be.
"LengthDecent Same as the last mission, it was 4 minutes.
"DifficultyEasy This time the mission was easy and i lost only [----//////] armor. Accuracy got increased
"VarietyGood Now there are couple new ones i have seen. Good choice of actors for that protagonist(forgot his name). Overall 8/10 I liked the ambush part and one cutscene didn't match. Anyway enemies got a bit improved aim, but not the health and also i liked the part where that guy shot the protagonist. Mission was fun and enjoyable. I think in the future your missions will be long and hard. KeepUp
Chinatown War by ToniForelli
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Hello everyone my name is ToniForelli and i will do another DYOM mission review, ok so lets start reviewing lee_atsugai's mission called Chinatown War from his mission pack called "Gangster and the Army" now time to review
"Writing:Very Good It was good and i've seen a bit of improvements. "Presentation:Excellent Not many cutscenes, but were positioned at the best angle.
"LengthDecent It took me to complete this mission in 6 minutes. Why? Because i had to kill Vice Gangs Leader otherwise it would take me 3 minutes.
"DifficultyVery Easy Is it me or i didn't noticed that they were weak. Health is good, but accuracy is bad and also lower protagonists health cause it was easy to take them down.
"VarietyVery Good Few objects and lots of actors. It's not the variety that counts. It's the mission's quality.
Overall 9/10 Mission was sh*t good and it took me some time. Make sure that the actors would be stronger with 75 accuracy cause it kinda felt like it was on 50-25 accuracy. Anyway nevertheless that the leader had lots of health.
KeepUp PS: Sorry for the late reply.
Act 1 by Arejai
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Here's the review for Act 1.
PLAYABLILITY 4.5/5 The playability was pretty nice! Although there are some mistakes along the missions, it's still good. The shootout started from the beginning of the mission, and it's challenging me sometimes.
BALANCE 4/5 This campaign was hard, but still I can beat them. The last mission(Act 1) is the hardest, but very enjoyable and fun. Almost all the shootout war was nearly hard to win. Yes, the enemies has a medium health, and high accuracy that I think it's set to 50-75.
CREATIVITY 3/5 You used the driving school and army ship as a place for training is pretty creative. But, it's still normal. You need to give a player something new, that can amazed their mind.
VARIETY 3.8/5 All the objects was placed on a right and good position. I loved how you arranged the objects at the training ground which is in the 2nd mission. It's creative but keep it realistic. About the skins, I'm very confused. You need to keep the skins to less than 10 types for one gang. But, I don't know, it's your style.
STORY / WRITING 4.4/5 Act 1 has a good plot and storyline. The protaonist started as a gangster and then become an army. It begin without instructions that gives a user a little bit confusing. It's nice beginning.
About the writing, all of them are good. Some of the dialogues seems a bit childish. But, it's still acceptable.
OVERALL Its required a good experienced & skill to play these missions. Not for beginner I think. So, anyway, good work, keep it up, and don't give up.
RATING 8/10
By Arejai.
Duthcy3010 and PatrickW for creating the DYOM Mod Chimpso for the DYOM Tutorials Arejai for the second mission inspiration ThaBoy for help me to improve the Third mission gameplay (added time limit in the test) and the Trailer ToniForelli for the review -S-hark21 for the video review kmlwin.1996, XTREME0235 and Panty Dropper for the header People who play my Mission Pack
Have fun!
This post has been edited by lee_atsugai on Wednesday, Apr 11 2012, 08:26
A pretty good beginning you made. I loved the gunfight in the Chinatown.
In the second mission, the car suddenly appeared. You could spawn the car from the start. About the stadium, good choice for a fight/shooting training. But, one thing you can fix is create new actor for the marine. He's talking to himself. So, work more on this.
I love the CQB training. All the objects are well placed. Good job!
In the 5th mission, when we need to defend the place, you didn't hide the actors. But, I loved the shootout.
Well, this is for suggestion. If you want to make Brian to be killed by the Breznev, set Brian to 'Hold position'. For Breznev, set him to 100 accuracy, health 2500(max) and 'Hold Position". And make the cutscene a bit longer like 4 - 6 seconds.
PLAYABLILITY 4.5/5 The playability was pretty nice! Although there are some mistakes along the missions, it's still good. The shootout started from the beginning of the mission, and it's challenging me sometimes.
BALANCE 4/5 This campaign was hard, but still I can beat them. The last mission(Act 1) is the hardest, but very enjoyable and fun. Almost all the shootout war was nearly hard to win. Yes, the enemies has a medium health, and high accuracy that I think it's set to 50-75.
CREATIVITY 3/5 You used the driving school and army ship as a place for training is pretty creative. But, it's still normal. You need to give a player something new, that can amazed their mind.
VARIETY 3.8/5 All the objects was placed on a right and good position. I loved how you arranged the objects at the training ground which is in the 2nd mission. It's creative but keep it realistic. About the skins, I'm very confused. You need to keep the skins to less than 10 types for one gang. But, I don't know, it's your style.
STORY / WRITING 4.4/5 Act 1 has a good plot and storyline. The protaonist started as a gangster and then become an army. It begin without instructions that gives a user a little bit confusing. It's nice beginning.
About the writing, all of them are good. Some of the dialogues seems a bit childish. But, it's still acceptable.
OVERALL Its required a good experienced & skill to play these missions. Not for beginner I think. So, anyway, good work, keep it up, and don't give up.
RATING 8/10
By Arejai.
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