[methods]

I removed this for personal reasons, please PM me for a copy if you would like.

This post has been edited by methods on Monday, Mar 4 2013, 12:17

[shiva s]

It's quite emotional and touching. Pretty short and good. I'm not that good in giving lengthy feedbacks but I'll wait to see what people have got to say about this.
Good job.

[El Zilcho]

There's something very human about this. The personal touch, the relateable public transport love and familial similarities immediately endear me to it; I feel at ease, if slightly depressed, when I read it. It strikes me as a sort of statement about modern technologies distance and isolation, simultaneously confounded and numbing human pain. But I think this might be slightly pretentious on my part.

It's got a basis in truth, no? Have some of these things genuinely happened to you? Because if they have, props on including them. They're heavy but very well entwined into the fabric of this work. I find the feeling here subtle but strong. I really enjoyed this piece, look forward to more mate.

[Linki]

I really enjoyed this. As others have said, it felt very human. It's simple and just deals with life. We can all relate to it in some way, and the neat writing makes it a pleasure to read.

[Mokrie Dela]

in some ways this touched me. I remember the days of Myspace, where i battled with some personal issues and part of that is reflected in the girl in chigago. Immediately i identified with her, and as others have said, the deeply human monologue.

It seemed slightly expositional - but i think the simplistic nature of the work makes it work well.

A good piece of writing here, that drew me in emotionally. Well done.

[mark-2007]

P. rad as always hombre, always loved your writing style. Is the opening paragraph something you've posted before or maybe shared on Facebook? It rings a bell.